Day 1:
The sun was setting as she parked the car under the giant Sequoia at the side of the cabin.I kept changing the sentence, but couldn't come up with one that satisfied me, so I decided to let a few days go by before trying again.
She parked the car at the side of the cabin just as the sun was setting.
The sequoia at the side of the cabin shaded the car as she parked it.
She heaved a sigh of relief as she parked the car under the Sequoia tree.
She locked the car door, relieved to park before the sun set.
Days later:
As she parked the car under the Sequoia, she noticed the vehicle following her slow down as it passed her driveway entrance, but it continued on.
That is about as far as my ability to write a mystery goes. I'll leave mystery writing to guys like Grisham.
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